Final Script

Character Designs

Annotated Script Draft

Summary of Script Feedback from Christopher Johnson

• The dialog is probably the main area that needs changing
• Instead of having Stella say "I fee so fucking directionless" have her imply it in an analogy. Such as the Well analogy used in West Wing.
• Try to apply the 'show don't tell' technique to your writing
• REMINDER: 'Show don't tell' = enable the reader to experience the story through action, words, thoughts, senses, and feelings rather than through the author's exposition, summarisation, and description.
• The narrative is kind of like a modern fable.